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  1. 1.a distinct section of a piece of writing, usually dealing with a single theme and indicated by a new line, indentation, or numbering.
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A low-level samurai from Tosa, he became involved in national politics and helped lead the way to the Meiji Restoration.
So he is a beloved figure in Japan and there have been several books, films and TV shows about him. Sakamoto Ryoma played an important role in the making of modern Japan. In Kochi, you can have a “Ryoma Holiday.” Because it is likely the Sakamoto Ryoma will continue to inspire future generations of Japanese young people.
He was not handsome, but he was a  very charismatic and natural leader.

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Because it has special products from Kochi that make great souvenirs. You can hear “Tosa-ben” spoken by the older shopkeepers. Every tourist to Kochi City should be sure to visit Sunday Market. Sakamoto Ryoma was from Kochi. It’s always lively, and right next to Hirome-ichiba and Kochi castle.
You can get a real feel of Kochi there.

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  1. Sakamoto Ryoma is a beloved figure in Japan and there have been several books, films and TV shows about him. He played an important role in the making of modern Japan. He is a low-level samurai from Tosa, he became involved in national politics and helped lead the way to the Meiji Restoration.He was not handsome, but he was a very charismatic and natural leader.In Kochi, you can have a “Ryoma Holiday.” because it is likely the Sakamoto Ryoma will continue to inspire future generations of Japanese young people.

    Every tourist to Kochi City should be sure to visit Sunday Market because it has special products from Kochi that make great souvenirs. It’s always lively, and right next to Hirome-ichiba and Kochi castle. Around there you can hear “Tosa-ben” spoken by the older shopkeepers and get a real feel of Kochi there.

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  2. Sakamoto Ryoma, a low-level samurai from Tosa became involved in national politics and helped lead the way to the Meiji Restoration.
    As he is a beloved figure in Japan, there have been several books, films and TV shows about him. In Kochi, you can have a “Ryoma Holiday” because it is likely the Sakamoto Ryoma will continue to inspire future generations of Japanese young people.

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    Sakamoto Ryoma is a low-level samurai from Tosa who is a beloved figure in Japan.He became involved in national politics and helped lead the way to the Meiji Restoration. It is said that he played an important role in the making of modern Japan by doing these things. And there have been several books, films and TV shows about him. In Kochi, you can have a “Ryoma Holiday,” because it is likely the Sakamoto Ryoma will continue to inspire future generations of Japanese young people.

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    Many tourists come to Kochi becauses there are pecial products that make great souvenirs. Every tourist to Kochi City should be sure to visit Sunday Market. When you go there, you can hear “Tosa-ben” spoken by the older shopkeepers. Also it’s always lively, and right next to Hirome-ichiba and Kochi castle.You can get a real feel of Kochi there.

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